GROW UP!
Grow up; behave, you should know now you’re older. Grow up, in Anne Frank, she writes many types of arguments, many with her mother. I sometimes have these arguments with my dad, but I don’t usually feel anger after, in contrast to Anne, I think that I even more mature then her. It is probably the fact that she always had her way, although I still get scolded for what I do. Even when I act myself my parents expect someone other than me at times. When you are young, you are expected to be naughty and mischievous. When spoiled young everybody thinks that you are a little angel. You get what you want all the time and when you don’t, other people around you get annoyed at you. Anne is from a rich family and Anne has always been regarded as a cheerful little girl of twelve. Her mother isn’t very close to her and so they had arguments about growing up. She realizes that her mother isn’t the pain, she is.
November 29th, 2006 at 1:51 am
Farouk -
Nice analysis of how children get spoiled. Do you really not get mad after you have arguments, though? You might have more in common with Anne and her feelings than you mention. Just a thought…
Mr. Alex
November 29th, 2006 at 6:52 am
You have done a nice job of describing what happened in the book, but didn’t spend too much time commenting on how you feel about it.
Also you seem to be falling a bit behind on your posts and blog organization. Please stop by and see me, so we can set you up.
November 30th, 2006 at 4:03 am
Hey Farouk,
I read your Grow Up paragraph and I just think that you should have had a introduction, though you had a good conclusion.
Here is what i thought about the 6 traits:
Ideas and content: It was clear and focused but you could work on your details.
Organization: The only htink you could do is have a introduction, in there put in your quote and what we have been doing and stuff. pretend like your reader does not know about anything that we have been doing!
Voice: your voice matched your paper but you could show ome more emotions!
Emma
December 1st, 2006 at 6:57 am
Farouk, that was a very descriptive blog entry! It surprises me how you can’t feel anger after an argument, as it is very hard for me to control my anger.I can tell that you’ve thought a lot about this blog, so awesome job!
The only advice I can give you is that use a wider range of word choice to add flavor to your writing! Well done.
Sai :]
December 5th, 2006 at 4:30 am
Farouk:
i thought your word choice was descriptive, broad range of words and that your word choice energizes your writing (”mischievous”)
your sentence fluency was generally in control but lacked variety in length and structure (kind of repetitive)
strong control of conventions, errors are few and minor “(you should know THAT now you’re older.)”
good job
p.s. i dont actually know if this is the “soul of a young girl” post. but i’ll write this just in case.
-catrina-
December 5th, 2006 at 8:19 am
Farouk what exactly are you trying to say here, are you trying to put down a 14 year old jewish girl in hiding during WW2 , when all the jews are being hunted down and persecuted? You started by yelling at anne directly and went on to this “Anne is from a rich family and Anne has always been regarded as a cheerful little girl of twelve. Her mother isn’t very close to her and so they had arguments about growing up. She realizes that her mother isn’t the pain, she is.” i dont understand this i also dont get it, why try to be mean to some girl. shes writing in her diary, it was personal, she can do what she wants. Show some empathy, is this supposed to be like hate male. BUt i do agree in a sense she is a bit cribby so dont feel bad about writing this but next time dont come on so forcefully